After completing the first project for this class I hope I do well but, It is also crazy to see how much my writing has improved. Looking back a couple years to high school to college the difference is jaw dropping. Before this project I had no idea what rhetoric was but after knowing all the different styles and knowing what they means helps as well. Completing this project was no easy task. First I had to locate 2 artifacts that went well together that were not written close together. Finding the two artifacts took me the longest time. When it came to typing up the paper it flew out because of my passion about the subjects. I could improve my writing process by learning to begin to proof read all of my work and slowing down a little bit.
Reflecting on and using both of my artifacts, I have to say I that I felt extremely passionate about both topics. I have been a Jets fan for all 20 years of my life and as all New Yorkers know, there is nobody like a Jet fan. We have not experienced the thrill of victory, but can relate all to closely to the agony of defeat. PTSD is also a topic I feel strongly about. I could not begin to imagine the pain PTSD puts not only on the individual but their entire family.
Both of my artifacts hold a special place in my heart. They are both areas in my life that I care about and will always pay special attention to. Being a Jet fan certainly has up’s and downs but I would not give it up for anything. Spending so much time and emotions on this team is something I will always live for. PTSD is also something that holds a special place in my life. I hope this disease gets a treatment where the numbers of suffering victims decline rapidly.
8 June 2014
I have spent nearly my whole life as a full time student. This semester marks the first time I am not considered a full time student. Taking one course allows me certain freedoms I do not have during the Fall and Spring semesters. I say this because, in the short period I have been enrolled in English 201 I listened and heard my professor say something I liked. Something I just never took the time to think about. My professor stated that everything we do IS some form of literature. Literature is defined as, “Printed materials that provide information.” Whether you are reading a book, writing a letter or, reading an advertisement it is all literature. When I heard that I kind of laughed to myself because it is such an obvious statement, so obvious in fact, that I feel blind for not seeing it sooner. When I was younger, I was never one to think about what I actually wrote or why. It was an assignment, so I did it. I was always the student the teacher would ask, “did you proof read?” I always responded with the same answer, “yes of course I did.” However, the reality was, I never did. I knew it and so did my teachers. IT WAS OBVIOUS! Writing is not my strong suit. I soon realized, with the help of a few special teachers, and a new-found dedication to my academics, I have become a stronger writer. Going to the writing center at St. Joseph’s College, and with the guidance from my professors, I have grown as a writer.
Being a transfer student I had to re-take English 101 so it would match John Jay’s version of the course. At first I was extremely angry that I had to re-take such a basic writing course. Now that I have completed it, I am very happy I had the chance to retake the course. It reinforced a lot of basic skills I had not yet mastered. English 101 was like learning to walk, one step at a time. We had eight assignments that led up to the final paper. Each student had the ability to choose his or her own subject matter for the final paper. Being a massive sports fan, especially a NY Jets fan, I chose to do my paper on the all that goes during an NFL offseason. This paper was written not only for me, but for all of the desperate Jet fans who were looking for something positive to deflect from the lousy season we endured. I was energized and excited while thinking about and writing this paper. I was passionate about this topic and the words just came. I tried appealing to the reader’s emotions by reliving my own personal football stories. I tried to show that the writer (me) knew what I was talking about and not someone talking nonsense. The explicit details I included in my paper were in explaining the daily grind of what every team does during the offseason. For example, there are some things that all teams must go through such as, scouting, player development and, that years draft strategy.
For my second writing artifact, I went back to a paper I wrote when I attend St. John the Baptist High School. Then I went back to in my first semester of college (2013) made a lot of corrections, and added a lot of information that was missing from the original copy. With the massive recent findings of PTSD, I felt the need to gather as much information on this tragic outbreak and see what the deal with it was. I wrote this paper for my Introduction to Psychology class. My professor wanted us to study a health outbreak. After going back and re-reading the paper, I found I did use the rhetorical analysis I learned about this semester; Pathos, Logos and, Ethos. I used Ethos because of all of the data research I used to show how big of a problem PTSD has become. I used Pathos in showing all of the emotional details that coexist with PTSD patients, especially in our nations hero’s; our soldiers who fight everyday for the freedom too many people take for granted. Finally I used Logos, by reasoning that no one should have to go through this.
Reflecting on and using both of my artifacts, I have to say I that I felt extremely passionate about both topics. I have been a Jets fan for all 20 years of my life and as all New Yorkers know, there is nobody like a Jet fan. We have not experienced the thrill of victory, but can relate all to closely to the agony of defeat. PTSD is also a topic I feel strongly about. I could not begin to imagine the pain PTSD puts not only on the individual but their entire family. These two papers connect pretty well because they both are research and stat driven papers. Both of these papers I believe are two of my better papers and I think it is because I am passionate about both subjects. If I don’t like the subject I am writing about, I have an extremely hard time. If I really like the subject the paper just seems to flow out of me.
After going through all of the literacy narratives on the course blog I found that the one written by Melissa Pascualini could be most connected to my papers and myself. Mellissa talks about the huge difference between writing in college and writing in high school. I found out the hard way. In high school I was so use to my teachers, especially my resource room teachers, constantly reminding me to finish my work, stay focused and plan my time wisely. I knew if I didn’t my parents would get a phone call from that teacher. In college, you could literally never show up to class and a professor would most likely not send you an email. You would FAIL. There is no, “I am going to call your parents” in college. It hit me like an 18-wheeler! I needed to remember what I was taught about time management quickly!
“We Are All Witnesses”
This ad to me is one of most influential ad’s in the history or sports. To those who do not know this is Lebron James, love him or hate him Lebron is by far the best basketball player in the world and had the chance to become the greatest player of all time. This ad came out in 2003 when Lebron was only 18 years old. Lebron at such a young age suddenly had everything, all the money he could think of and the work ethic unmatched by any previous NBA rookies. This ad was a staple in the city of Cleveland everywhere you went you saw this ad, on the sides of buildings and on TV it was everywhere. In 2003 an ad like this was very un common for a un-proven rookie but everyone simply knew once he stepped foot on a court he was something special. “We are All Witnesses” has since followed Lebron in his NBA career. To me this ad just shows the power and attention Lebron got at such a young age since him there has not been someone who captured so much attention and the desire to watch his other move on the court.